Poetry Contest [Feb. 6-14, 2004]

[jayx8318x]

[center:dd8fe368b8]Official Contest #2: Poetry Writing[/center:dd8fe368b8]

What
In time for Valentine's Day, jay-chou.net is sponsoring a poetry contest for our members.

When
Contest runs from Feb. 6-14, 2004
Deadline is Feb. 14, 2004 in your timezone, you'll know when it's over because this topic will be locked.

Eligibility
Everyone registered who has at least 30 posts.

Rules
1. One submission per member
2. At least 7 lines, no more than 50 lines.
3. Subject of the poem is up to you
4. Format of poem (whether haiku, sonnet, limerick, ballad, free verse, etc., etc.) is up to you.

Submission
- You are to post your submissions right here, by replying to this thread.

- I want all contestants to see what the other contestants are submitting.
It may seem unfair if you post something, and the next person used yours to come up with something better, but you can EDIT your poem up till the deadline of Feb. 14
(all of you should know how to edit your post, click on the http://www.jay-chou.net/forums/templates/HiddenTrack/images/icon_edit.gif)

Judging
We will run a poll for all members to vote from Feb.14 - Feb. 20, 2004
Prize for 1st & 2nd place only.

Prize
It's a surprise, and will be announced at the end of the contest

Questions & submissions go in this thread, it will be cleaned up to contain only submissions at the end of the contest.


Note:
*Those of you who participated in the mini-contest, sad to say we have to forfeit due to too few submissions (5). From now on, any contest (whether official, or mini) must have at least 10 submission to keep the contest running.

[wackycashew]

what a cool contest! :D well, guess i'll get the ball rolling... whew... just made the 50-line limit. heehee... :happy:


Wounded


Another sleepless night
Sitting in the still silence
Melancholy settles in
Stirring the room with a gloom
Unwillingly, I tremble
As thoughts of sadness hover in my mind
My heart aches
Seemingly disturbing the stillness

From deep within me
A voice cries out for rest
I yearn for comfort
But found none in the seclusion of this room
Loneliness hangs about
Not quite sure where it fits in
But somehow finds a corner to reside
Blending in with the backdrop

Staring up at the ceiling
I ponder the question, “Why?”
It’s not the first time
And I’m sure it won’t be the last
It’s not so much that I don’t understand
Or that I’m seeking an answer
But at times when I’m stumbling
I catch myself wondering

I try to ease my mind
But fail to do so
Quietly sobbing
Nursing my wounds
Not daring to whisper a word
Keeping all the pain to myself
A tear fights to push itself down my cheek
But the rest of me retaliated, refusing to let it stream down

A familiar scar is being unveiled once again
The old feelings have subsided
But the memories haven’t faded away
And now those emotions are resurfacing
The fact is that a part of that pain is still buried inside
Whether or not I admit it
I cannot escape
I cannot hide

What am I to do?
How am I to cope?
My mind speaks the only solution
Leave everything in God’s hands
I know in my heart that this is all I’m capable of at this moment
There’s nothing more I can do
Please give me strength, my Lord and King
To carry on

[bee]

One Grain of Sand

You look up
at the sleeping sky
with small stars speckled
across it's powerful face

Wisdom beyond your years rests there

can you feel the knowledge
that whispers above you?

It suddenly drops upon you---
An unexpected wave...
washing over you with questions...
with answers...

Even the smallest stars,
beyond the range of our sight
have a meaning that can only be guessed
but never understood or known

But you are only one grain of sand,
falling through the fingers
of a stranger's hand
dropping, moving, shifting
in the breeze

And you are lost amongst
the existence of others
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cool contest...seems like not many people are posting tho...heres a random poem.

[Odium: De_Vangelis]

What an interesting contest...It's good to put our feeling down in words. :)
Here's mine:


Blue Night Sky
by: Odium: De_Vangelis

It will be only you and me tonight
Dancing under the full moon light
Eye to eye, heart to heart
Darling...just hold me tight
be with me throughout the night

Share your feeling, don't keep it inside
Whisper it in my ears, explain it in your tears
I'll be the one who embrace you from your fears
Smile...then I'll certainly know that you're mine

Let your hairs gently fall onto my face
Let your lips gets slowly closer onto my lips
Close your eyes, feel our warmths
Touch me softly when lonely comes

Darling, listen to the rhythms of our heartbeat
Count them together as we breathe
We'll make tonight a night of our own
and we'll never be alone
Cause it's a blue night sky tonight

Blue night sky, blue night sky
Could this night be the only night?
I can't bear to leave you
I just wanna fall for you
Let this never be our last night...tonight

Silver star light, silver star light
Would this night stay forever?
A night that we both will remember
Where your innocent eyes tell me no lies
Where your tender lips let the time flies
Let this never be our last night...tonight

[thejay]

Well, I guess I'll pop in my own entry then! :oops:

The Proposal

There is nothing to worry about,
I've already got everything worked out!

My darling and I, on top of the hill,
Quietly enjoying the evening chill.
While the clouds obscure the sky,
The moon and stars are standing by.
At the right moment I'll give the cue,
The sky will change its colour and hue.
The birds will burst into a song,
While the moon and stars emerge to sing along.
The grass and trees will begin to dance,
A great choreography of love and romance!
She will be absolutely thrilled and amazed,
While the sight and splendour leave her dazed.
As the night comes alive in a blink,
Everything's perfect and all in sync!
Before it all recedes into a blur,
Comes the moment for me to say to her:

My darling, I don't mean to give you a fright,
But... will you marry me tonight?

What a brilliant plan, I must confess,
I am sure to achieve success!
But if this plan fails, there's no plan B,
So tonight, luck had better be with me!

-theJay

[.VaN.]

:huglove: From Me to You

I’ve nothing else to offer
So, to you, its love I’ll send
It’s nothing that I borrowed
And it's nothing that I’d lend
It has no dollar value
And it can't be overused
It isn't fragile
So I can’t break
Though often it’s abused
I've given it to others
But each time it's unique
It’s meaning's always different
It depends on what u seek
It something u can store away
To feel you're in need
But never is it on display
Its beauty can’t be seen
I’m giving it "no string attached"
No costly warranty
This love that I am sending
Has a lifetime guarantee

:love: :cloud9:

:thanks:

[sabriel]

Romeo and Juliet
Had it right.
If we can’t make it here
We can do it in the next lifetime.
But if you want to live
You can only love me a little

Just a little
So no one will know
So no one can take it away
Keep it between you and me

Just a little
So only you will know
So only I will know
Just you and me.

Because I am never yours
You were never mine.

[smilepiggy]

giving it a try. for the only reason is i'm a lit student. i love literature, but literature doesn't much like me.and i kep failing, that's all

He had been on my mind,
No one can replace.
When we both left school
on our separate ways,
I just couldn’t tell you I love you.

Years on, I still think of him,
His face vividly in my memory,
But I know
I may never see him again.

Till I felt a presence near me
Yet the shadow hides far away
Holding on with me
In my downest moments.

When I fell, someone gasped
Hestitated for a while, he held himself back.
I could feel him this very moment,
But where he is,
I couldn’t see.

When I cry, someone sighed
Wished he could come forward
Wished he could lend a shoulder,
But he remains far away.

He looks on, he held on
Is he the him in my mind?
God, let that presence be him.
Give me a chance to tell him
I love you.

as his shadow draws near
I know its him,
We were rooted for so long, in disbelief,
Its him I felt in presence
The him whom I missed years ago.

He thought I’ve forgotten him,
I thought he had went on with life,
He thought he couldn’t find me anymore.
I thought he didn’t think anything of me before.
But alas, he said
I love you.

[Jaymee]

Hello to all fans,

Here is my poetry i hope you all will like it! :)

Across the miles with you, my love

My love
I have a secret to tell you
I'm really shy and nervous
to express it
for I have no way of knowing
how you will respond
But lately my love
my heart seeks your company
they say you never know
where you will find love
that is so true in my love,
you were there all along
standing there yet I was to blind to see the beautiful
in front of me.

My love,
I know I'm good with words;
But please listen closely for these are not just words I feel
my darling,
I want to hold you in my arms
and kiss you so tendely
I want to take walks with you
I want to hug you
I want to seduce you in the most romantics way
The music of my heart is playing
I want you to be the one
I give myself to you, darling

I may be making a fool
of myself once again
but this to hold on to
my darling I have loved you for so long
yet I chose the deny those feelings
for I wanted to keep your friend's hip
but now my love I have nothing to loose
by my dignity
Will you be with me forever?
And I will make sure that
our relationship flourishes
as I will always
love and respect you, my love!


*The End*

-jaymee-

[adnam8]

doesnt seem to be many entries. i wasnt gonna submit, but then seeing as how im curious about the prize :laughing: , and theres not enough entries so far, ...here goes.

just a highschool romance gone wrong. no title, and no meaning.. anymore :oops:


It started with a smile, a giggle, a laugh
It grew as we talked, chatted, conversed
The atmosphere was loose, relaxed, comfortable
The humorous times we had, shared, enjoyed
The phone brought us closer, more serious, more intimate
The fun that we experienced online, in parks, on trains
I knew it wouldn't last. I watched your attention drift
You grew weary, our chats became shorter
The times I spent waiting, longing, wishing
You left me at school, on the phone, online
My mind a blur and my heart in pieces, I sit
Sit in wait for you to notice me once more. For you to hold me.
The comfort I needed you witheld. Friend?
The promises you made mean little, nothing, less
The times we shared now in the past, memories, forgotten
You no longer call, chat smile. Not to me
You share your warmth to the world. While I sit in shadows
What happened? Where are you? How have you been?
Yes. It is time to move on.


*sigh* memories :cry:

[hisashiluv14]

Some background information on the poem: It was inspired by Ed Harris's film, "Pollock", about American artist Jackson Pollock and the relationship he shared with his wife (he eventually died in a suicidal car crash, by the way). There was this beautiful, beautiful scene in the film whereby Pollock and Liz Krasner, his would-be wife, just met and shared a GORGEOUS intimate moment, and it was so effectively filmed, with a mild lulling in the background, and the camera was shooting from a distance and that scene inspired the poem, though I had words in my mind when I watched it but was too lazy to grab a pen and a paper to write them down, so the poem isn't as good as it should've been, but ah well. :)

Love

distance.
darkness.
awkwardness.
touch.
clothes.
taking off.
closure.
he's afraid.
she's willing.
he's hesitant.
she's patient.
fingers.
skin on skin.
draw closer.
mere shadows
against darkness
two stars
against light.
two bodies
apart, and then,
together.

lips. hands.
one rigid, frigid,
the other gentle, guiding.
Pollock & Krasner.
darkness.
we watch from a distance.
like we're detached,
separate.

two figures.
standing.
one reserved, the other ready.


lips. hands.
and then,


a kiss.

**

I'm quite cynical on the subject of love, but that scene really, really moved me. You guys have got to watch the film. It's fantastic.

And if the poem sounds raw, it's because I wrote it in four minutes and didn't bother to edit it, as usual. :)

[Kakkyo]

Here's what I had written for my 2nd month anniversary for my girlfriend. It's mainly from my fascination with my image of the roaming Chinese philosopher swordsman wielding a long sword to protect a woman from harm.

Yuxia de Xin by Kakkyo
Of the years I have lived life,
I sought to find my soul
I sought to understand my heart,
My eyes have seen hard fighting,
My body worn away from the fatigue of the battlefield,
Age has made me wise from experience

Through my mortality,
I have felt biting pain,
I have cried bitter tears,
The elements have beaten me senselessly,
Despite the memories of suffering and sorrow,
I stand strong from the challenge of the world

Adventurings have lead me far and wide,
I have been to the darkest lands full of pain,
I have seen venues bright with light overflowing with joy,
Through wealth and poverty,
My knowledge has grown tremendously,
This heart has gotten its share of experience

Love has been a test of my soul,
My heart subjected to wretching pain,
My trust violated to some of the most horrid extremes,
My soul in unrelenting anguish,
My eyes overtaken by tears full of sorrow,
Even from all that... I remain standing

My heart continues adventuring even now,
I am constantly being taught new life lessons,
From meeting a dreaming princess to earning a new sword skill,
I have learned to find my heart and empower my soul,
She has given me power in my soul and my sword to defend her wishes,
I am her errant knight protecting her heart

[vashdestampede]

hmmm...i've posted this before....
but i saw this really beautiful girl
and i was hormonal
(it was THAT time of month....again....)
so i wrote it about her.....


Perfection

your eyes, they glow with fire
in the mid afternoon sun
they look at me with desire
no gaze can be outdone

your skin, like a river
a flow of the smoothest creams
such gentleness i can't deliver
in any of my wildest dreams

your lips, in every way subtle
but more revealed the closer i get
by themselves a worthy rebuttal
for my argument of regret

your neck, a romanticist's bliss
it's always warm to touch
the most sensual place to kiss
i adore it twice as much

your arms, long and slender
so toned yet remarkably soft
it's hold is warm and tender
their hugs suspend me aloft

your hands, small and cherished
are always holding me
when touched, my pain is perished
in heaven i will be

your waist, smooth and curved
i wrap my arms around
held to keep preserved
no gentler embrace found

your legs, ideally slim
gorgeous in every way
clearly the perfect limb
i cherish them day by day

your back, slowly sloping
my fingers traversing the spine
keep going, you are hoping
yet the pleasure is all mine

your laugh, a tiny wonder
it always makes me smile
it would cast evil asunder
and ease my mind for a while

your voice, like a flute
always melts my heart
how can anyone refute¿
you're won me over from the start

your thoughts, open-minded
unfettered by the truth
never emotion blinded
my personal confessional booth

your heart, fortified strong
it holds on in difficult times
next to mine it does belong
our beats synchronized rhymes

your love, for me undying
most precious of any emotion
it gives me the gift of flying
and to you, my unquestioned devotion

[Viv]

I was thinking of topics to write and I couldn't get anything so here's my topic:

Writer's Block

No inspiriation.
I've got nothing to say.
Life is so pointless,
but so is this essay.
I've got,
A writer's block.

I can't concentrate.
My mind is a blank.
I've nothing to write,
and nothing to say.
I've got,
A writer's block.

Total blankness.
The pages are white.
I think I should stop.
I think I just might.
I've got,
A writer's block.

It's pretty bad compared to all the other entries so bare with me... :blush:

[phoebe]

backgroud - . tsing yi is the main island near the new new chong kong airport called Chap Lek Kok .Tsing Ma bridge connects the hong kong airport to a man -made island. one of the fun mode of public travel in hong kong is the double-decker bus - and one can take this bus from the airport by the Tsing Ma bridge to the city . wonderful scenery along the way.

TSING MA BRIDGE RENDEVOUS

Chill breeze against my face.
Eyes squeezed to suuny haze.
Endless planes hurtling through the sky,
Challenging vessels below skimping by.

Seen from this double-decker,
Unchanged scene etched forever.
Same view far and wide,
Locked memory through time and tide.

Clutching the window rails,
( I used to hold your hands.)
Shivering from the autumn winds,
( You used to hold me close .)
Listening to songs with my headphones,
( We used to whisper nothings.)

Tsing Ma Bridge, Tsing Yi touchbase,
Wonder of steel , strength and grace.
Tsing Ma Bridge, connecting land and land,
Span of Hope , where our love ends.

[Jo]

Wings.Torn

the skies seemed black today
or maybe just deep gray
as the sun illuminates
the dark chased it away

desolation crept
along the land so bleak
without the light and heat
coldness trapped the free

my wings were cased in ice
how could i've been so blind?
to soar through sky so high
then fall to my demise

i called for you once more
my feathers worn and torn
but you kept locked the door
...did you love me no more?

as death drew ever near
the sky grew bright and clear
my wings were freed though teared
i thought my life was spared

you swung open your door
and saw me on the floor
...did me you still adore?
i flapped despite my tore

you slowly inched towards me
your hands...they held something
you saw me flap my wings
yet tighter still you cling

as i struggled to you
and cuddled at your shoes
i heard gunfire and soon
felt a sting pierce through
my blood...the snow...imbued
i...i still...love you...

[fat_penguin]

this was part of a story i wrote.. so it might sound a bit eweird..

as i stare out the window,
i think of you and me
and even though you’ve let me go
i’ll never be truly free...

because i’ve given you my all
as you laughed right in my face
i couldn’t believe your gall
as you gave me a spiteful taste

of what it’s like to be truly hurt
to have your heart torn to shreds
did you really have to be so curt
as you messed around with my head?

i wonder why i still feel this way
but you’re all i’ll ever be
and with each approaching day
your face is all i see

if i never live to love again,
and all i’ve known is you,
then how will i learn to bear the pain
of missing you the way i do?

teach me how to forget
the person i’ll never be
because i’m plagued with constant regret
of all the things you’ve done to me

these tears i cry are not for you
you’ll never see the way i bleed
i try to hide behind a wall or two
but it’s too late for my creed

if you never feel the slightest shame
about all the things you do
then know this, that despite my pain
i died in love with you
____
haha its dumb.. but oh well..

[Kyoko]

Just in time!!! This was what I posted in my Deviantart account...

.Tornado. (Long Juan Feng? X3)

Love is like tornado, moving way too fast.
It comes before you notice.
It goes before you realise.

Love's like coffee, bitter yet sweet.
Love is you and me, standing in the breeze.
Love's a roller coaster ride, having ups and downs.
Love is you and me, after a fight.

Love is like tornado, moving way too fast.
It comes before you notice.
It goes before you realise.

I always tried to define love, but none seems to be the perfect explanation.
Love needs to be felt, it also needs warmth.
Treasure love when you can feel it, before it leaves destruction like the tornado.

Love is like tornado, moving way too fast.
It comes before you notice.
It goes before you realise.

Love was when I loved you, one true time we held on.
Love was when we meet in our dreams and held on to the wind.
Love was when I felt something swept me away from the world.
Love was when tornado hits us and left us spinning in our own world.



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Eh... Mind me... I know this is a really bad poem, and I know it because I have some 自知之明. XP Just feeling enthusiatic and wanna give a try~

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[Seltsi]

My weak attempt to get a poem in before the thread offcially closes, lol. (w/ 1 hour remaining!)

ANTHONY

Hidden away in the heart of the city,
You sit perched on a lone park bench,
Isolated from the earthly world
As the night embraces you.

Over and over one question reigns,
Taking control of your mind,
And tormenting your soul.

Why must it be so that the world runs this way?
You hate the truth of the world’s mechanisms,
And yet have in your hands no power
To change it for the better.

And thus instead you go through life,
Oppressed and silent, yet always
With a rebellious streak underlying it all.

Time and again you’ve tried to surpass
The injustice of your position,
But no good it does you
When you’ve got bitterness ruling.

To see past the inequality,
And accept the fate of your life,
Is to learn to forgive.

The sins of your mother,
Combined with your father’s,
Are not yours to carry on
As a burden onto yourself.

With a new look on life,
And the world in general,
A window will open up.

Brush aside your hatred,
And gently face your fears.
Forgive them for their faults;
Learn to be yourself.

Know one thing,
And that is this:
No one is perfect.

*Written for my friend, Anthony, of which the poem is named after. Just trying to help him move past something.

[kahel]

I don't know if I'll make it...I hope I can.

anyway...it's kinda R18. hehe. But here's my entry...

May we always have this
awkward silence
in between
our fingertips,
our stares and,
our sighs.

Under the covers,
in sleep's bed
frozen seconds,
frozen moments,
frozen breaths.

May we always have this
beautiful memory,
of a whirlwind night
in the calm of the morning.

~The Morning After~

[jayx8318x]

OK, no I didn't forget about this contest!
But so much has happened, with the forums going down and all. I'm going to compile them and we'll vote!